Thanks for sharing this. :) I keep meaning to write something Zeffiris-centric myself, but the whole issue of AI intimidates me. You handled it pretty well, I think, especially the contrasts and similarities between Zeffiris and Natalie.
Noticed a couple of little errors:
The most chilling thought was that she had indeed gone insane just like every other Dragoon that had survived it’s Lord. - Since this is a possessive, it should be "its," without the apostrophe.
Both physically but also in his fiercely protective love for his siblings. - Kind of an awkward construction. Might be better to change it to either "Not just physically but also [...]" or "Both physically and in his [...]" just to make it smoother.
It had felt both aching familiar and heartbreakingly wrong to merge with him. - Since it functions as an adverb, that should be "achingly."
I <3 ShannonxZephy even if I am going to burn for it. XP
Why would you burn for something that's practically canon? XD Sure, her child-like appearance takes the creep factor up a few thousand notches, but still!
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Noticed a couple of little errors:
I <3 ShannonxZephy even if I am going to burn for it. XP
Why would you burn for something that's practically canon? XD Sure, her child-like appearance takes the creep factor up a few thousand notches, but still!